The formatting gets a little messy as I try to jam it in this blog. The original draft offers a little more character development and profanity:
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Bill, Yasu, and Liz are in a music store, shopping through CDs.
CAPTION: November 12, 1996. My favorite record store. Carina and I were spending every night together since we had met. My days were spent hanging out with Liz.
So you mean you two still haven’t sealed the deal?
Um, we, uh, we’ve sealed stuff.
Yeah, but have you done the deed?
Yasu is shaking his head. What is the hold up? Is it Carina?
She does not strike me as the chaste type.
She’s practically begging me for it.
Bill, you do realize she is into you because of your power?
Peculiars are drawn to more powerful peculiars.
She’s crazy about me, Liz.
That is because you boost her magic. She probably gets a
buzz just hanging out with you. I know I do. Have you told
her about you and Yasu yet?
You are such a pussy. Come on, you have to fessup and come
clean. If any chick would be cool with it, it’s her. She’s a
I’ll think about it.
Oh they have Whale! Have you heard these guys? They are
the bee’s knees.
CAPTION: November 15, 1996.
Bill and Carina are seated together on the couch. Yasu is seated on the floor in front of the television. There is an open bottle of wine on the coffee table and two glasses.
So Liz thinks we should do it.
Very insightful, that lady. She might be the most magnificent
person I know.
I think you’re pretty magnificent, yourself.
They kiss. Bill takes her hand to lead her back to the bedroom.
Should I turn off the TV?
Of course not. Bill never turns off his television.
Could’ya turn’t to fifty-eight before ya go?
Bill grabs the remote and changes the channel.
Do you have protection? Or should I--
I’ve got it covered.
Stainman’s eyes are closed. They open. His eyes dilate.
It is a dark room. Candles. He begins to cast a spell.
Oh Lords of Bone and Ash, hear your servant’s prayer. Guide
me. Guide your proud servant to the power, to the fork-soul
your servant seeks. That your servant might consume this
life-force to better serve thee. Oh, Lords of Bone and Ash,
hear the words of my prayer--
The Blonde Waitress’s corpse is seated before him. His spell animates the body. Her eyes fill with black and she begins to speak with a strange voice.
Eeeeeahhhhst. East by south-east. Fifteen and one third miles.
This page is different. The gutters are white and the edges of the panels are blurred. There are empty word balloons, but there is no text in the balloons. The only text on the page is the song from the car radio: TBD.
A tiny blue car on the a city street. Carina is driving. Bill is in the passenger seat and Yasu is seated in the back.
Bill notices a kid with a doll in a car net to him. He sees an old man picking his nose.
Then a tanker-truck turns over in front of them and they crash.
Bill and Carina crash through the windshield severely injured.
CAPTION: November 16, 1996.
Bill awakens from his nightmare. He appears shaken. He is sleeping with Carina. He rises and steps out into the living room.
Where Yasu has fallen asleep in front of the televivion.
Yasu? Hey, buddy. Are you asleep? You alright?
Yasu opens his eyes.
Had the worst nightmare.
Bill and Yasu are in the kitchen. Bill is brewing coffee.
We had shared the nightmare. Yasu had never slept before. He had never dreamed.
She’s doin’ somethin’ to us.
When she healed Liz, she thought her magic got a boost
because Liz‘s a werewolf. It was our power. We super-
charged her spell.
I don’t think it’s intentional.
But what’s it doin’ to us? More specifically, to me?
Mmm. That coffee smells heavenly.
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Carina and Bill kiss. Bill hands Carina a mug.
Good morning, lover.
Last night was—
Suddenly, Stainman explodes through the wall and window. Debris scatters around the room.
Yasu moves behind Bill. Carina steps in front of Bill.
You are outmatched here, witch.
Carina begins to cast a spell. Her hands begin to flare with energy.